tepid ore
This is one of my first commentary videos and I am not sure if they are turning out well or not, any feedback is very very appreciated!
#Feedback on commentary Video about Boogie2988
lean lava
Honest feedback as someone that knows nothing about Boogie2988, so take what I say with a grain of salt.
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I think the thumbnail is strong, given that your audience knows his face and it is a recognizable icon.
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I think (for me) the TITLE of your video could be stronger, particularly given how bombastic the claims are. "Boogie caught lying about cancer diagnoses!" or "Boogie caught RED HANDED lying about his cancer" etc.
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Your first two or three sentences of narration are setting up the scandal, but I wonder if there's a way you could have made it more personal to the audience. For example, did Boogie take donations from his fans? Did he get a bunch of collective pity / visibility? Did he exploit the cancer diagnosis to build his platform?
I think showing off what he gained from the lies, and asking the question< "what's going to happen now? What are the reprecussions from these actions?" will make the audience want to stick around or find out the answer.