It's a little long winded.
Ideas to streamline:
- On the part where you say "have you noticed your iphone sucks at getting up close" try cutting to the blurry scene of you showing the problem.
- I don't really care for the part where you lean in close, feels a little invasive.
- Maybe after the "sucks at getting up close part" you cut back to you saying something like "what if i told you there was a better way" and as you say "better way" you raise your hand into frame holding the device and it zooms in on the device.
- Maybe show how to attach to the phone from the outside, pointless to see you put it on from the iphone camera's perspective.
- Not really undestanding the ending, the files are on printables, but its from a kodak camera, do I need both?
Overall not bad or anything, being overly picky in my feedback. Good luck!
meager thorn
shadow vault