#How can this video be better? (editing, storytelling, etc)
meager river
rough robin
First of all
Your editing is incredible!
the content you're producing is an amazing start.
I think your problem actually is marketing your video!
Let's start with the Title;
The title now is "HOW KSI LOST HIS FANS IN A DAY"
Great start to a title but here's some other ideas,
"HOW THIS STREAMER LOST ALL HIS FANS IN ONE DAY"
"HOW KSI WENT FROM MILLIONS TO NONE"
Now I do believe the title you have now is great but it might be skewing your reach with the audience. Attract people who are KSI fans but do not attract people you aren't! Just a suggestion, I think you're honestly fine here but some thoughts just in case!
Your thumbnail is where I see a lot of problems.
I enjoy the photo you picked for KSI as it shows a very aggressive look for him with the title you currently have BUT it doesn't STICK OUT!
You could do a before and after thumbnail where side A is KSI happy with millions -> side B being KSI sad with nothing (maybe photoshopped as homeless)
KSI has tons of fan but for his fans to see him homeless in a thumbnail would attract them!
OVERALL - ADD CONTRAST TO YOUR THUMBNAILS!
the background you have now, doesn't contrast KSI and stick out in the YouTube Page. the text isn't need since the title basically states the same thing! KSI should be taking around 75 - 85% of the thumbnail since it's a story on HIM!