Hard Critique My Video

[opal bolt]

You go straight into the video content which is great.

You're a little hard to hear sometimes, I'd try speaking a tiny bit slower and maybe boosting your commentary volume a tad.

Writing is good, you bring up backed up points and couple them with your personal experience/perspective.

The background music sounds bad. Background music is good for this kind of video but this specific track is unpleasant lol.

The thumbnail is nice and clean but doesn't tell me what the video's about. You could add big text and arrow pointing at the game character with like "DEAD ON ARRIVAL?" or "SABOTAGED" or something that piques interest and touches on the video's content. You could even add two red crosses over her eyes to give the thumbnail some color (draws attention)

You need a little something to break up the constant commentary. You're speaking at native speed, which is different from a presentation speed. So it starts to jumble together and just sounds like someone ranting about something for 4 minutes. It's hard not to tune it out after 2 minutes and I stopped listening. You need peaks and valleys to keep my attention. Maybe a pause or cut to gameplay or just something to break up the video. Imagine if someone started talking to you about their fantasy football team non-stop for 4 minutes. After a minute or two you'd mentally check out.

[harsh spear]

@opal bolt what do you use to determine if the audio is loud enough? I was using my ear buds at the time and figured it was fine 😅 Any higher and my ears were hurting so I took that into consideration.

I never really push much thought into background music honestly 🤔 it was from an old ps2 game. So I understand the criticism there.

The thumbnail is something I've been tweaking here and there. 😅 I copy there two tubers I watch in a sense but I think adding text will help a tad.

Commentary is also something I'm toying around with. I tried to sound more animated. And I was also trying to add a bit of humor 🤔 but I didnt think about the fact of me talking fast. Thanks for pointing that out. 😅 I hear that there should be no silent moments so that's what I was trying to fill there

[kind wren]

1.23-1.24 Glitch in graphics.
2.19 Glitch in graphics.

I don't care about the topic, but the way you present it by casually talking about it actually makes the video quite interesting. Good use of graphics and memes. I would personally try to keep it a little more consistent in the style of graphics, but i'm sure that's not something people will pay attention to.

It does feel like it's slightly dragging at the end - be more precise with that you are saying.

Video itself is good.

Title and thumbnail is not something I would click on especially as you have reused the thumbnail template for the last 4 videos. It could work for some, but not in this case. SunnyV2 reuses his thumbnail style which is simple and brilliant.

[harsh spear]

😗 A lot of tubers I watch use the same template when it comes to TB. I wanted to have a thumbnail to where when people seen it they knew it was a "Lux" video also I like "simple" :3

[neat oasis]

Here's my 2 cents. This is totally based on where I also need improvement as a content creator and thing ive researched over 100s of hours of self improvement.

The Idea of the video. The idea of the video can carry a video very far even if the editing is bad. As a small creator you might want to focus on trendy topics and make similar styled videos that could be a new game that came out or is about to come out etc.

The audio is fine, I'm better at audio than video and I can tell you that it's loud enough.

Try to be more creative with your edit. It was just very plain to me. Don't take this as disrespectful because this is something I'm currently working on myself. By more creative I mean don't be afraid to make a joke and silence the audio, to feel like your engaging with the audience as well instead of reading off a script etc.

Sound effects when making a list try to add dings if not something to kind of give the listener and the viewer that you're going down a list of reason why people should play this game.

That's all I got for you man best of luck. It's a grind and I'm also trying to grow!